
The following poem by Thomas Lux is an example of a style known as pantoum, where the lines are repeated and the pantoum is written in quatrains (the second and fourth line of each stanza become the first and third of the next. Therefore, “the principle is one of repetition and of echo”.
All The Slaves
All the slaves within me are tired or nearly dead. They won't work for money, not for a slice of bread. Tired or nearly dead, half underwater, wanting merely a slice of bread: the inner slaves, singing, Half underwater, wanting only a few flippers to swim, the inner slaves, singing the depth-charges within. Only a few flippers to swim! And a sensor to sense the sound of the depth-charges within- that's all they ask for aloud. A sensor to sense the sound, a hearer to hear the small aurals: that's all they ask for aloud. They're slaves with slaves' morals. Hearers hearing small aurals they won't work for money. They're slaves with slaves' morals, all these slaves within me.
I love this. I will definitely try it.
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Cool, I’ve been practicing a bit, lol.
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Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem. I didn’t know about this form (not surprising as I know close to nothing about poetry), but am intrigued.
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Of course, you are very welcome. I’ve been trying to find motivation to step up my poetry, lol so I went back to my bookshelf.
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Well, this one is very motivating. Hope you post one of yours soon.
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Thanks, I’ve been struggling to create one that I’m happy with. I just can’t seem to crank ’em out like I used to.
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Powerful poem. I really life that form.
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Thanks, it’s a hard one for me to use.
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What a beautiful poem and fun style of poetry to learn about, it has a wonderful sound to it. It is fun to play with words in such different ways. I once tried a style of poetry called paradelle, what a challenge but lots of fun!
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I love to play around with words. I was the kid who entered every spelling bee, lol. Now, it’s simply to help with my memory, smh.
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Powerful poem, Tammy! Interesting to learn about the structure and style too.
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Thanks Ab. I haven’t been able to write much lately, so I’m thinking that sharing poetry styles may be a good substitute.
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I hope things are ok. I enjoy reading your literature selections. Says a lot about your interests and perspectives!
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Thank you. Merry Christmas my friend!
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Wonderful poem.
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Glad you enjoyed it π
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Affecting and powerful poem.
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I’ve been attempting to step up my poetry game, it seems to be more challenging than I thought, lol.
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You’re doing great. Keep going! π
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I appreciate you. Have a great week!
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Thank you!
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This is very cool!
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Now this is different and challenging too.
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Lol, yes it has proven to be very challenging. I’ve been practicing π
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Beautiful poem
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